Grammatical Corrections
Tuesday February 07, @11:26AM, by The Crude Defense Machinery
Subject : General
from the dept., little dept.
Summary :

I dont't speak or write the English language, so I need a grammar help for my poem that I writed ( in English, obvious )

A VILLANELLE FOR YOUR JOB ( blow, ass, rim etc )

Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles When the aged cowboys come so far And then, you have to suck and fuck and smile

Jumping over a huge condoms pile You try to fly high and reach that Star Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles

Eating cum, breaking wind and drinking green tea for a while Ah, those old members looks at you so familiar And then, you have to suck and fuck and smile

Running for miles and miles and miles and miles Travelling alone in some imaginary Jaguar Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles

Oh, baby, I liked so much of your new hair style But you're so stoned that started trying speak Chinese and Zaar And then, you had to suck and fuck and smile

You will be soon transformed into a kind of reptile Don't panic on while I walk through this old-fashioned bazaar Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles And then, you have to suck and fuck and smile

( This very poem is dedicated to a J-cocotte thats worked in Kyoto city, Japan ).

• Re: Grammatical Corrections
  Tuesday February 07, @11:29AM, by The Crude Defense Machinery
  A VILLANELLE FOR YOUR JOB ( blow, ass, rim etc )
  
  Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles
  When the aged cowboys come so far
  And then, you have to suck and fuck and smile
  
  Jumping over a huge condoms pile
  You try to fly high and reach that Star
  Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles
  
  Eating cum, breaking wind and drinking green tea for a while
  Ah, those old members looks at you so familiar
  And then, you have to suck and fuck and smile
  
  Running for miles and miles and miles and miles
  Travelling alone in some imaginary Jaguar
  Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles
  
  Oh, baby, I liked so much of your new hair style
  But you're so stoned that started trying speak Chinese and Zaar
  And then, you had to suck and fuck and smile
  
  You will be soon transformed into a kind of reptile
  Don't panic on while I walk through this old-fashioned bazaar
  Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles
  And then, you have to suck and fuck and smile
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• Re: Grammatical Corrections
  Thursday February 09, @04:59AM, by The Counter Culture Club
  

  > A VILLANELLE FOR YOUR JOB ( blow, ass, rim etc ) > Be pure of heart and avoid the sleaze befriend your angel and not your imp try placing an aspirin between your knees

  Resist whorish temptations with ease A pebble in your shoe will make you limp Be pure of heart and avoid the sleaze

  Do not spread your legs like a tramp; be as grounded as the trees Here is an idea that will confound a pimp try placing an aspirin between your knees

  Remove the stench of evil with a good breeze Swim in the pond of chastity like a fairy shrimp* Be pure of heart and avoid the sleaze

  Birth control is just a chemical tease Masturbation is alright for a chimp try placing an aspirin between your knees

  Do not be responsible for the spread of a social disease Indulge in virtue, do not skimp Be pure of heart and avoid the sleaze try placing an aspirin between your knees

  • small freshwater branchiopod having a transparent body with many appendages; swims on its back
  
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• Re: Grammatical Corrections
  Thursday February 09, @06:20AM, by The Counter Culture Club - Reformatted
  My poem did not format correctly. I will try it again...
  
  Be pure of heart and avoid the sleaze
  Befriend your angel and not your imp
  Try placing an aspirin between your knees
  
  Resist whorish temptations with ease
  A pebble in your shoe will make you limp
  Be pure of heart and avoid the sleaze
  
  Do not spread your legs like a tramp; be as grounded as the trees
  Here is an idea that will confound a pimp
  Try placing an aspirin between your knees
  
  Remove the stench of evil with a good breeze
  Swim in the pond of chastity like a fairy shrimp*
  Be pure of heart and avoid the sleaze
  
  Birth control is just a chemical tease
  Masturbation is alright for a chimp
  Try placing an aspirin between your knees
  
  Do not be responsible for the spread of a social disease
  Indulge in virtue, do not skimp
  Be pure of heart and avoid the sleaze
  Try placing an aspirin between your knees
  
  *small freshwater branchiopod having a transparent body with many appendages; swims on its back
  
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• Re: Grammatical Corrections
  Thursday February 09, @06:24AM, by The Counter Culture Club - Reformatted
  

  Darn it!

  
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• Re: Grammatical Corrections
  Thursday February 09, @03:56PM, by Tam
  

  > Darn it!

  There, fixed that for you. For your information: use the "Plain text" option to keep your "natural" formatting. Structured text uses its own rules for formatting.

  Oh, and there is that "Preview" button too. You may want to use that before you post ;-)

  
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• Re: Grammatical Corrections
  Wednesday March 01, @07:31AM, by The Crude Defense Machinery
  ( Dear fans and brothers, here is the ultimate gramatic corretion for this very poem )
  
  A VILLANELLE FOR YOUR JOB
  
  Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles
  When the aged flying cowboys come so far
  And then, you have to suck and fuck and smile
  
  Jumping over a huge condoms pile
  You try to fly high and reach that Star
  Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles
  
  Eating cum and breaking wind, drinking green tea for a while
  Ah, those old members looks at you so familiar
  And then, you have to fuck and suck and smile
  
  Running for miles and miles and miles and miles
  Travelling alone in some imaginary Jaguar car
  Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles
  
  Oh, baby, I liked so much of your brand new hair style
  But you're so stoned that started trying speak Chinese and Zaar
  And then, you had to suck and fuck and smile
  
  You will be soon transformed into a kind of computer file
  Don't panic on while I walk through this old-fashioned bazaar
  Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles
  And then, you have to fuck and suck and smile
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• Re: Grammatical Corrections
  Wednesday July 12, @02:27PM, by The Crude Defense Machinery
  

  I had modified the title of my very poem from "A VILLANELLE FOR YOUR JOB" to "A VILLANELLE FOR YOUR LOVE". I changed it because the word "JOB" means something biblical. Then, for J-individuals, this is certainly offensive or abusive. So, I wonder why they think that way but I make my job. Remembering my brothers and fans that I don't speak nor write English. Thank you!

  
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• Re: Grammatical Corrections
  Friday November 17, @02:08AM, by tryuytr
  

  > I had modified the title of my very poem from "A VILLANELLE FOR YOUR JOB" to "A VILLANELLE FOR YOUR LOVE". I changed it because the word "JOB" means something biblical. Then, for J-individuals, this is certainly offensive or abusive. So, I wonder why they think that way but I make my job. Remembering my brothers and fans that I don't speak nor write English. Thank you!

  
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• Re: Grammatical Corrections
  Friday September 29, @12:20PM, by 5 dollar love you long time!
  

  you jap fucks are a bane to humanity!!! You whaling fucks love young kids and big whales....what the fuck!!!!!!!!!!!???? > I'm a whale eating cum muncher!!!!!!!!!!!Whats >up with the pre birth face lift????????green >tea for a while > Ah, those old members looks at you so familiar > And then, you have to suck and fuck and smile > > Running for miles and miles and miles and miles > Travelling alone in some imaginary Jaguar > Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles > > Oh, baby, I liked so much of your new hair style > But you're so stoned that started trying speak Chinese and Zaar > And then, you had to suck and fuck and smile > > You will be soon transformed into a kind of reptile > Don't panic on while I walk through this old-fashioned bazaar > Wandering in your hoity-toity sort of isles > And then, you have to suck and fuck and smile > > ( This very poem is dedicated to a J-cocotte thats worked in Kyoto city, Japan ).

  
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